Click or scroll to see more. | So, after some wise feedback from the writer’s guild–which I’ve named it in my own private universe, mind you–I’ve put down some of the story arc for Jahn and his band of weirdos, with the following excerpt as a result. I realized today that I’ve written about 6000 words thus far. I hadn’t realized I was grooving quite so long on this particular go. But having found a point at which to begin that seems to satisfy some of the holes my fellow guildies pointed out to me, I find that I am cruising. So.
When I put down these excerpts, I sometimes get feedback that would benefit from a longer section. That’s the curse of only reading a chunk out of context, I suppose. I’ve tried to include a little more, though in order to truly get the flavor of what’s happening in this section, you’d need another five pages.
Ah well.
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He was dreaming again.
This time he was seated around a campfire, one of five cloaked figures who sat staring into the flames. The light danced with particular vitality in the eyes of a young woman. He noted, as he always did when he dreamed of her, how her eyes caught any sort of light and seemed to draw it down deep inside of her. They were eyes filled with a silent sadness. Her usually full lips were set in a line—a shame, he thought, since her smile was brighter than flame, brighter even than the red gold of her long hair when it caught the sun at midday, as it had in countless dreams before this. It was a smile as rare and fleeting as the silence before morning light. He missed it.
He watched her for a long moment before the figure next to him leaned forward to throw another log on the fire.
“Better not let her catch you staring,” the figure whispered. His voice had the cold rasp of steel, a sound flexible but crisp, like the long thin sword that lay between them on the log. The man turned his hooded head. Only his nose, a beak of a nose, and a few stray wisps of long black hair caught the firelight.
“Jahn,” the man said, even more quietly, “What happened today?”
Don’t ask me, Jahn wanted to say. I’m dreaming. But he knew it would do no good.
Another of the fire watchers pulled something out of a backpack—a small harp—and struck a few plaintive notes. Everyone around the fire stirred as if waking from dreams of their own. The beak-nosed man groaned and scuffled his toes in the dirt.
“Please not tonight, Tamper,” said the woman.
“And why not?” The man named Tamper threw his hood back. He was an impish looking man, face slim and sprightly, his head fringed by a perpetually floating halo of thin white hair. Jahn thought his frown looked petulant. “This is a morose bunch, is what this is,” he said.
Next to him, the largest of the five figures raised a huge gloved hand to his shadowed face and rubbed at an invisible chin. “Morose,” it said, slowly and in a voice sounding to Jahn like a subtle avalanche, “What does it mean, Tamper?”
The old man glared at the woman for a moment before answering. “It means,” he said, “to have a brooding, ill humor.” He turned a lofty eye towards the woman.
The massive figure hummed to itself. “Oh,” it said.
The woman sighed and glanced at Jahn. She caught his eyes for only a moment before looking back at Tamper. He wished she would have let the look linger, would have seen his thoughts unraveled there in his eyes for her to see. But the rules of the dream were explicit. He could not speak, could not move—only watch as the dream unfolded around him.
Maybe if she looked long enough, she would see: we’ve never met except in dreams, but I love her. The Weaver bless me, I don’t even know her name. But I love her. The thought caught up with him and he shook his head inwardly, marveling at himself. She’s not even real. How ridiculous am I?
But there had been many dreams. He could recall easily how she had looked standing in the market square of Jubal town, the white shirt she wore clinging to her body as they all stood sweating in the heat of the desert city. He remembered the keen edge of her voice slicing through the crowd to catch the attention of the man who sold them their myriad, felt the warmth of her hand as she handed him the tiny glass bottle of sand that she had purchased with her own silver. For Tamper’s obscure rituals, she had said.
In another dream, he recalled her singing. Her voice wasn’t as fair as the young lady’s with the harp who played before them in the crowded inn, but it had a richness to it, a quality at once warm and sad. Everything she did was tinged with that great sadness. She wore it like a second skin. But though he had spent many nights dreaming of her, her sorrow was as mysterious as her name. She was the dark beneath the waves, and he was a battered bark riding high on the crest of a dream.
“Tonight is not the night for practice, old man,” she said. Her eyes grew clouded.
Tamper clutched his harp to his chest. “Careful your words,” he hissed, “You’ll warp the wood.”
“How about I cut the strings?” the beak-nosed man said, and allowed himself a small chuckle. “In the name of all those whose purses have inexplicably suffered the same fate in your presence?”
Tamper gave him a look of both horror and disgust, and clutched the harp even tighter. “When we first met, recall who tried to rob whom,” he said. Then he drew himself up straight. “Anyway, the harp is a noble instrument,” he said. “I wouldn’t expect to find noble ears on a man whose favorite pastime is skewering mice.”
Like lightning, the sword that had laid still and silent between Jahn and the beak-nosed man sang as it was pulled from its sheath. The man had gone from sitting to crouched on the balls of his feet in an instant, had pulled the sword so fast that it seemed as though it had always been there in his hand, reflecting the fire along its entire curved length. The tip was pointed right at Tamper’s heart.
“Found one,” said the swordsman.
In the time it took for Jahn to take one long unsteady breath, a complete silence settled around the fire. Then Tamper began to laugh, a high-pitched, wheezing sound. He laughed so hard he had to gasp for breath.
Then he shrugged, and threw the harp in the fire.
“The harp is a miserable instrument,” he said, his eyes wide and serious.
Kal chuckled and put his sword back in its sheath. Tamper grinned and pretended to be relieved. Even the woman, as absorbed as she was in her own thoughts, smiled briefly. Only the huge man seated beside Tamper seemed concerned. His hand still hung in the air where he had reached out, reflexively, to catch the harp before it arced into the fire. Slowly he let it drop to his side, empty. “But Tamper,” came the dull rumble from beneath the man’s hood, “I heard you. You were talking to yourself, I heard what you said after you took that from the lady’s cabinet. You’ve always wanted to learn to play the harp.”
The old man sighed and patted the huge fellow on his massive shoulder. “I am a man of many fancies, Rul,” he said. “But I fancy my life above all others. It was only a toy, anyhow. Not what you’d consider Tryia’s finest. She’ll hardly miss it.” He looked up at the man with the long thin blade. “Oh do sit down, Kal. You’re making us all nervous.”
Kal, Jahn thought, Shyrian for hawk. The man certainly seemed to fit the part. It was the first time he had heard the man’s name spoken aloud, in all his dreams. And Rul? Must be something Tamper made up. I’ve never heard of a golem with a name.